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sofiadorathy
12-17-2003, 05:21 AM
When I was young and full of life,
I would dream of a kinder life.
A place where I could go and find,
Friends of a nicer kind.

Now I am older and here I sit,
Looking in this net of life.
And to my surprise what do I find,
A list of friends of the nicest kind.

My days seemed to get shorter,
I had no place to go.
My mind was still as active,
But my body moved too slow.

This poem is a mixing of 2 poems from the following link....

http://www.korrnet.org/chips/cc/poems.html

Be Happy....

king_143
12-17-2003, 05:36 AM
Be Happy....,

I see no link between 1 & 2 with 3, but 1 and 2 seem to be from the same poem. As stanza 2 and 3 do not appear to continue.

But this is really good ...

sofiadorathy
12-17-2003, 09:17 AM
I see no link between 1 & 2 with 3, but 1 and 2 seem to be from the same poem. As stanza 2 and 3 do not appear to continue.

But this is really good ...



oh king.....I m glad to explain this yaar...lol....I have a doubt, I hope u will clear me the doubt....so that u can understand whats the reason for ur question....

My doubt is...... Would u read the topic of a post before u read the message in that topic or not????

Actually I was waiting for some gr8 Genius in geetham to ask this question...but u came the first...come on..... if u think about my doubt then u will understand it.....lol...dont get tensed...always....

Be Happy...

king_143
12-17-2003, 09:36 PM
Be Happy ....

I do not get tensed always. I read the topic and then its post. The topic says two poems as a single.



But this is really good ...


This is to appreciate your work i.e taking two stanza from different poems to make into a new poem



I see no link between 1 & 2 with 3, but 1 and 2 seem to be from the same poem. As stanza 2 and 3 do not appear to continue.


This is the comment on the new poem

I just dont read I try to understand if required ...

Shy
12-17-2003, 09:50 PM
Sofia its really good.. can u tell me which phrases are from different poems.

its mended out well..

If I understood correctly,

First about the young age
Second about the old age
Third thinking in old age with wishes to enjoy but body not cooperating.

Did I get it correct..

That was really wonderful sofia

Shy

sofiadorathy
12-21-2003, 12:45 PM
Hey King I m sorry....

Thank u Shy and King for encouraging this poem...and sorry for the late reply also....

1 & 2 are from one and the 3rd is from another.....if u have any doubts go to the link i given in the topic...lol

Be Happy....